Journey to a Life Worth Saving
It wouldve been very easy for me to fall into a total overprotective, controlling, possessive, domineering husband and father role, but then Erin wouldve yelled at me. I dont think I couldve hidden it from her, so I didnt even try.
But I wanted to.
There would always be that part of me that wanted to bundle up Erin and the baby and hide them away in the middle of nowhere, like up high on a mountain in one of those one room cabins. Wed be all alone, just the three of us.
During the day we could play with Gideon and teach him all the little things you teach babies, and at night Erin and I would huddle underneath a big blanket, snuggling and using our body heat to keep each other warm.
That would be the life, but I didnt think it would ever happen. Life can only be so perfect until it blows up in your face. I think living with Erin and Gideon in the lake house was as perfect as it could get.
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I woke up early one morning and looked at Erin sleeping next to me. The circles under her eyes were as dark as theyd been when we were in the Arbour House. Leaning over her I pressed my lips to her hair, thinking shed wake up, but she didnt.
It was obvious she was exhausted. Even with me around, she worked hard taking care of Gideon, and with Thane off looking for his mystery girl, Erin had taken to watching the front door. She would look over at it time after time, and I knew she was waiting for him to come back.
I think she was worried, that he might not come back after they were finally getting along, finally connecting the way siblings usually do. Once he got back, she wouldnt worry as much, but for now, she would.
Slipping out from between the sheets, I pulled on some clothes and checked on Gideon, quickly changing his diaper before he had the opportunity to whimper. I carried him out to the kitchen and set him down in his car seat, buckling him in. Wait right there, little guy, and Ill get you something to eat. Whatd you want, formula or red stuff?
He burbled at me, grinning and waving his arms around in circles. Sorry, Gideon, we dont serve helicopters in this house, and you cant really drink them.
I wouldnt try sticking one in a blender. You might break it.
I turned at the sound of Erins voice and saw her walking over in her bathrobe, her hair pulled back. Her eyes were heavy, like she was half-awake and somehow able to walk, and her feet shuffled against the floor.
I filled a bottle with formula as Erin picked up Gideon to cuddle, and stole him away from her. I wont. We have a really nice blender. Settling the baby back in his car seat, I held up his bottle for him and pulled Erin up against my side. Why arent you in bed, pretty girl? You look terrible.
Thank you so much. You really know how to make a girl feel wanted.
You know what I mean. I tipped her face up towards mine and kissed the tip of her nose. Youve barely gotten any sleep between taking care of Gideon and waiting for your brother to show up. Go on back to bed and Ill drop off our first born at the main house so they can take care of him.
Erin pressed her face into my shirt, rubbing her cheek against the fabric as her hands grabbed hold. No, dont take him away.
Then go back to bed and Ill watch him out here. My arm slid around her shoulders and squeezed. Youre just about dead on your feet, and I dont like seeing you so tired. I kissed the top of her head, breathing in the scent of her hair. You go get some more sleep, and Gideon and I will have some father-son time.
She chuckled and nodded, a tired smile curving her lips. Okay, but dont go teaching him any of your bad habits.
I gasped in mock anger. I have bad habits? Since when?
Rolling her eyes, she turned and kissed Gideons cheek. Have fun with Daddy. Dont listen to him too much. You might pick up some strange quirks.
Gideon burbled at her as she headed back to the bedroom, his pudgy little hand reaching out for her. Picking him up, I bounced him around before settling him at my shoulder. Dont worry, little guy. Mommy needs a big nap, and your Uncle Thane is a stupid vampire for making her worry so much. When he comes home, youll get to play with a not so tired Mommy.
My palm stroked his back, moving in slow circles until he burped. Keep that up and youll win burping contests in college, if you want to go to college. It wasnt so bad. Maybe one day Ill go back and get a degree. I dont know what in. I sat down on the couch, Gideon leaning into my chest, and my eyes drifted over to my guitar case. I could go back to studying music, or film.
Gideon grabbed onto my shirt, his body growing heavy as he drifted off to sleep. Hey, how am I supposed to teach you things when youre falling asleep? Chuckling to myself, I moved to lie down on my back and settled Gideon on my chest, his hand curled up by his mouth. Youll be up and whimpering for a clean diaper soon enough. Ill share some of my secrets with you then.
The TV remote was on the coffee table in front of me, so I reached out and pressed the on button. Since Gideon was asleep, I turned down the volume and channel surfed for as long as I could before falling asleep.
The first thing I saw when I woke up was a gun pointed at me.
The second thing I saw was the woman on the other end of the gun looking at me with an unbalanced look in her eyes.
At least it wasnt Erin.
She looked familiar, but my mind couldnt focus on where Id seen her. I think it was because of the gun pointed at my head.
I glanced down to make sure Gideon was still asleep, and the woman smiled a smile full of pleasure and insanity. Dont worry, hes still asleep. We dont need to wake him up just yet.
No, we dont. I stayed where I was so I didnt upset her, and tried to keep my voice steady. Inside my head, my wolf was snarling, wanting to sink his teeth into her. Is there something youre looking for? I dont have a lot of cash, but I have some if thats what you want.
The woman shook her head, her face flushed with blood. I dont need cash.
Then what do you want? Maybe I can help you find it.
I want your baby.
My heart stuttered in my chest and thumped against my ribs with enough force that it made it hard to breathe, but I worked to keep my face blank. Excuse me? I dont think I heard you right.
You heard me just fine, werewolf. I want your child.
Okay. Is there a specific reason why you want him?
The grin that spread across her face made my blood run cold. Theres never been a documented case of a vampire and a werewolf having a child together. There were always rumours of couples hidden away out of the public eye, choosing to keep the pregnancy a secret and hiding away the child, but then you two surfaced with your miracle baby. Its in the vampires medical files that she had your child. Its in the babys file that hes part vampire and part werewolf.
She started laughing to herself, my opinion of her shifting from crazy to psychotic and deranged. So, youre going to give me your half-breed baby, and Im going to take him somewhere so they can study him, see what he can do and how strong he is.
The hand holding the gun trembled slightly as she waved it at me. Now get up, put the baby in the car seat, and hand him over.
I got up slowly, cradling Gideon against my chest, and took my time walking to the kitchen. I buckled him into the car seat, looking down at his sleeping face as I fought to keep my wolf inside my head.
Foolish pup. A human comes into your den with a gun, threatens you, demands your child so others can perform experiments on him, and all you do is what she asks of you? What are you thinking? Let me out, Ill rip her arm off, show her what happens when she tries to kidnap our pup.
I tried to tell him that I had a plan, that I knew what I was doing, that she wasnt going to take Gideon from us, but he wouldnt listen.
It took long moments to push him back into submission, moments I didnt have, and the woman pushed the barrel of her gun into my back. Stop stalling, werewolf.
Okay, okay. I reached out to stroke Gideons cheek, and turned to keep my body between him and the gun. What about his diaper bag? Hell need changing soon, and I imagine you wouldnt want him crying because you dont have anything to change him into.
I dont need your stupid diaper bag, Im not an idiot. She took a few steps back and waved the gun at me again, her hand trembling more than it had before. Hurry up and give me the damn baby!
Her shout echoed through the house. I wondered if the sound woke up Erin, but then Gideon murmured behind me. I looked to see if he was still asleep, and saw him with his eyes closed, his chest slowly rising and falling.
The woman screeched at me, her entire body shaking. Youre not listening! Youre ruining everything! Why cant you do what I want and hand over than damned freak of a baby?!
I clenched my jaw, somehow refraining from biting her hand off, and saw something move in the corner of my eye. I didnt look at it, in case the woman planned on shooting me if I did look away, and kept my eyes on her. Hes just a baby.
No, what he is is something new, something unexpected, a freak of nature. Who knows what hell be capable of when he grows up? He needs to be contained and studied, kept under lock and key so he doesnt hurt anyone. Now hand him over or Ill shoot you!
Something moved again, and I saw Erin appear behind the woman, quickly trap her arms, and sink her fangs into the womans neck.
















Critiques
This was Simon at his likeable best. As I've said before, I enjoy watching him struggle with his inner wolf. In this case, I wanted Wolfy to win.
Now, on to a new thought that occured to me as I read this piece. There may be one major issue with all of Into the Moonlight, and it involves the conflict. Your characters are appealing, the dialogue is real, and you have a pleasant voice to it all. BUT the conflict is ever changing.
A novel should have one primary conflict that drives all of the action. ItM has a NEW and different conflict every so often. In this case, it is the kidnapper determined to have this baby.
I don't know why I am only noticing this now. It may be because we all post things on dA in episodes. Or it may be that I've enjoyed the characters so much I wasn't seeing the forest for the trees. In any case, you may want to look back at all the different conflicts, pick one, and rewrite things to focus on that one dynamic. You can always save the other conflicts for follow-up novels in the series.
Just a thought.
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